Today we reflected and researched that our narrative needed a focus that would tie it really clearly to its target audience. That is late teens and young adults, the sort of people who would enjoy films like 'The Inbetweeners' and 'Angus Thongs And Perfect Snogging', 'Bridget Jones Diary'.
For this reason we have decided to include an Australian Gap year student (same age as target audience who will be the narrative viewpoint and deliver the story. We will use her voice over to explain the events. Our revised treatment is below:
Waitress: gap
year student who tell the story
Main chef: Heston
Blumenthal inspired chef, who is a perfectionist.
Extras: Hollie
and Annie who are new to the area and are soap celebrities. Biker boys. Posh people. Fat couple.
Location: Local
restaurant
Ideas: Chef chopping
cumber, very articulate and fast, characters reference him to Heston
Blumenthal. Splat of
sauce with the word edited in the pan, names on menus and the main title on a
cumber which then gets cut up letter by letter.
TREATMENT: Our story is told from the point of view
from an Australian 18 year old girl
who is here on a gap year. She gets things done and helps out being a waitress
and organises bookings in the restaurant. She is very down to earth and capable
because her parents run a restaurant in Sydney and she’s had a lot of
experience in the restaurant business already. She is often surprised and
exasperated by the incompetence of the staff, particularly the perfectionist
chef who would really be happier in a science lab.The narrative view point of the
film opening is delivered through her voice over.
The film opening starts with an establishing shot outside a
restaurant before moving into the interior. Australian girl Dani walks into the
shot, checks on her phone and disappears into the restaurant.
Interior: Mid shot of Dani walking in through door. Walks over to The Chef who is
standing at a work table planning his menu for the day. The table is covered with
all his results of his latest experiments and enthusiasms: green porridge,
snails, test tubes, beetroot mergine. He gestures with a big beam on his face
at his menus and tries to convince Dani (who looks sceptical).
Like a mad Heston Blumenthal, blue food colouring everywhere, plates are perfected,
combining weird ingredients together however he doesn’t seem to worry about the
chaos he is causing. Meanwhile Dani voice overs scarcely ‘are you trying
to be some Heston Blumenthal or summin?’.
Cuts to soap celebrities at table, one saying 'This is so not like LA' and the other says 'OMG my hair extension', The Aussie does a voice over saying (what a tart).
Second scene is shown of the biker boys, who appear in leather jackets, one has his foot on the table, they are complaining about how the food isn't 'rocky' enough for their taste.
Third scene is a two person shot where the posh people are seen rather pompous and complaining about the food, one comments on their 'cholesterol'.
Fourth scene with the overweight vulgar couple is show them having a conversation about 'how a thin person is waiting to get out' of her obese body. All these characters are stereotypes, to make it more comedic.
